Very good effort, good concept.
Good effort and idea with this, but there's a few things that kinda make this a little unpleasant to listen to- first of all, the bass is a bit clicky. Also, a lot of the other stuff is kinda saw toothy, which would be fine if you just mixed it with something else. I like what you did with the cymbals, and the way the song built up. The cymbals could have been even better if you sliced/ granulized them intermittently, and made some more complex rhythms. Very good job overall, keep up the good work.